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“I’m sorry.
I can’t live a lie.”


did I hear you right?

[shocked, smile crushed
like squeezed lemons,
it's empty]

“It’s time for me to go. Actually…
  It’s been overdue.”


whats been overdue? What’re you saying to me?

[voice collapsed, shrunk, only a whisper
like a dried leaf,
shriveled, broken]

“I can’t do this anymore.”

stay here. I need you

[knees of gelatin, quiver, fall
resting on the cold ground,
chilling bones]

“You don’t need me.”

yes I do. Stay with me. I can give you anything you want !

[hands shake, cold winds blow,
hope flies away, next time,
hold on tighter]

“Look... Here's the thing: You can’t give me what I want.
Because I don’t want you.”


you don't want me? What about all those times…
Those places we’ve seen,
Those memories we’ve had,
The mountains we’ve overcome…
Will it all go to waste?


[Eyes dull, mind numb
machine unable to work,
out of order]

“Well…
This is one mountain we will not overcome.
These memories are best thrown in the trash.
Why would you keep memories that will bring you pain?”


it once brought me happiness. I will always want to remember when I would be happy. And I was happy with you. Weren’t you happy with me?

[breath shallow, lungs empty
heave desperately to
fill the missing spaces
inside]

“No.
Listen..
I’m doing this for you.”


if this is what you need to do…

[frozen, searching for hope in a wasteland
lathered in despair,
there's nothing here anymore]

“yes.”

promise me. Promise me that you wont forget us

[heart heavy, soul sore,
trust betrayed,
it'll be harder to trust
next time
(if there is)]

“Good-bye.
You won’t see me again. I promise that much.”



[each step away..
breaks my heart.
this is when
I fall apart.]
:iconhawaiianhulagirl:

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:iconpseudocide335:
You have a very visual way of doing your poetry, such as the small print and the italics. It's very powerful. :)

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Eddie: “You are gay. Act like it once in your life.”
Peaches: “You’re a man. Act like it once in your life.”
-- [link]
:iconhawaiianhulagirl:
Haha. Thank you (:

The italics is the person talking to the character (small font) and then the regular is how they feel.

Haha, it's for a contest (:

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Be your own work of art.
:iconpseudocide335:
I hope you do well. :)

--
Eddie: “You are gay. Act like it once in your life.”
Peaches: “You’re a man. Act like it once in your life.”
-- [link]
:iconhawaiianhulagirl:
Thanks (:

--
Be your own work of art.
:iconlotuskid:
i like the syntax alot. the subject matter is a downer, but the beauty of poetry is it's not the experience thats most powerful, but the proof of feeling. Like your character said, the memories are good as trashed but the feelings of happiness you cherish are forever.

--
saliva always tastes
different depending on who's
mouth it comes from - Lotuskid

Though you hold me still,
I shudder like the thunderstorm— Miseria-Cantare
:iconhawaiianhulagirl:
Thank you =)

That's how I look at life. Though things change, you will always remember the emotion from before. You can forgive, but it's much much much harder to forget.

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Be your own work of art.
:iconpoetryplease:
This poem was selected as the one to be featured for Challenge #39! Congrats! I really enjoyed how you had three distinctive trains of words going on that weaved together well. Enjoyed the word choice and imagery on the bracketed sections (i.e. squeezed lemons).

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:iconmariposakisses25:
this is breathtakingly painstakingly beautiful! :D Instant :+fav:

:heart:
:iconhawaiianhulagirl:
Thank you so much! It means so much to me that you liked it, not to mention favorite it! =)

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